Something I Wrote

[MarieDelta]

Transition

Under the ice
Fish wait, impatient
For spring.

The ice pushes
Against the shore
Fracturing itself.

Snow drifts form
Atop the ice
Pressing down.



Please feel free to critique, I am a big girl.

Cheers,

Marie

[onewhocares]

Nicely done Miss Marie

[HighEnergy]

Ah Spring. I'm looking forward to that! Your poem makes me look forward to catching a couple of those little fish and frying 'em up for dinner on a spring evening.

Nicely done. Poetry gives each of us the opportunity to spark our imagination. Great way to start the day. Thank you.

[arana]

That was nice Marie, keep it up....the writing that is...errr....well...whatever you want to keep up keep it up :tong:

[Skater Boy]

keep it up....the writing that is...errr....well...whatever you want to keep up keep it up :tong:

:bigrin::cutelaugh:bigrin:

[diB4u]

Awww Marie that is really nice.

It clearly suggests a persons inward struggle as opposed to the outwards struggle.

The snow driffting down represents almost a new begining or a change. The pressing of the ice indicates either a block of negativity or something that has to be suppressed maybe a repressed memory... this being fractured basically means what you put, that the repression is about to be fragemented into smaller strands. Or that the change is afoot.

I like it.

[Skater Boy]

Awww Marie that is really nice.

It clearly suggests a persons inward struggle as opposed to the outwards struggle.

The snow driffting down represents almost a new begining or a change. The pressing of the ice indicates either a block of negativity or something that has to be suppressed maybe a repressed memory... this being fractured basically means what you put, that the repression is about to be fragemented into smaller strands. Or that the change is afoot.

I like it.

A somewhat psychoanalytical interpretation... interesting. I wonder if MD intended such symbolism.

[diB4u]

A somewhat psychoanalytical interpretation... interesting. I wonder if MD intended such symbolism.



Ahhh dude you know me well... I dont know if that what she intended... but :tong: thats what I see... I also like to give an explanation to dreams that my friends and I have...

[MarieDelta]

Ahhh dude you know me well... I dont know if that what she intended... but :tong: thats what I see... I also like to give an explanation to dreams that my friends and I have...


What I intended doesn't matter IMO. Art, poetry, writing are all subject to the readers/veiwers interpretation.

In other words diB4u's interpretation is accurate in that it reflects her views.

But also it is a simple poem about fish, ice and snow.

What you get out of something is what you put into it.

Thanks guys,

M

[Doggie_Wood]

:cool: Very nicely done Marie. You have such a fantastic ability to meld the simplistic with the complex, allowing it to flow as a melting stream.

:doggie:

[Cherokee_Mountaincat]

As a writer myself, I can say this is good stuff. Write on, Sweetie. :}
Cat

[12voltman59]

Good stuff Marie!!!

[Doggie_Wood]

Have you more? :bounce:

:doggie:

[MarieDelta]

Have you more? :bounce:

:doggie:

Since you asked:

What I Want

I want More bang for my buck
I want cheap gas
I want Peace with justice
I want love with hope
I want hot sex
I want you

I want more than I am getting
I want to be the best I can be
I want to be better than I am
I want hot monkey love
I want to be held close
I want smooth soft skin
I want to write like TS Eliot, or Garcia Lorca, or Whitman
I want you to want me
I want a hot rod that goes so fast, but hardly burns any gas
I want everything to be low maintenance

I want a perfect wory free day
I want hard cocks and wet pussies
I want sleek hard bodies and nice firm breasts
I want a large breast to lay my head upon
I want silky nighties and panties
I want thigh high stockings and garter belts
I want angel haired hipsters seeking that acient connection to the heavens
I want the stars and the planets
I want the valleys and the mountains
I want to live while I live
I want no regrets
I want men with hard throbing cocks
I want heaven in a nutshell
I want the ultimate bliss
I want understanding
I want to be understood

[Doggie_Wood]

Bravo!!

Pretty demanding tho - LOL

:doggie:

[**Peg**]

oh MD how lovely... I now dub you an honourary Canuck (that's Canadian) LOL

**Peg**

[diB4u]

Well done marie.... A woman needs to know what she wants out of live.... So I say go for it girly...

Although i dont have a hard cock lol, i have one of your requirments- will that do?:female::):tongue:

[MarieDelta]

Well done marie.... A woman needs to know what she wants out of live.... So I say go for it girly...

Although i dont have a hard cock lol, i have one of your requirments- will that do?:female::):tongue:

You can buy a hard cock, one that never goes soft!:tong::bigrin:

[parkerbi]

You did a good job. Go ahead!:flag3: